"Raptor" - An Original Song by TimDisturbed


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TimDisturbed


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What's up guys, I wrote these lyrics to a song that I created called "Raptor". I would like to thank Raven for suggesting the name for this song. Also, feedback on the lyrics would be greatly apprectiated! Thanks!

(Intro)
There is a dinosaur side to me
And he likes to come out and prey
On the weak and strong alike
Is there any hope I can be free
From the clutches of this beast I obey
If I cannot destroy
This dinosaur inside of me
Another victim will fall
Into my decoy

(Verse 1)
It's just another one of those days
Where I live without worry of betray
The monster inside senses its next prey
I have no reason to listen to pleas
Anything will soon become debris
I can feel their thoughts like a skeleton key

(Pre-chorus 1)
Just as I think its all over
I feel another push in my mind and body
As the dinosaur inside tries to escape again
When I thought I was safe and sound
My thoughts come about of another food chain

(Chorus)
This dinosaur destroys my senses and
Conquers my soul
I cannot resist the temptation without self-control
When my next prey is within reach
I charge ahead and pray to God
That the dinosaur inside does not
destroy me this time

(Verse 2)
With a never ending appetite for human flesh
I stalk apon helpless people and creatures alike
Ready for an attack and quickly strike
An endless count of victims isn't enough
My thoughts just come off the cuff
I'll always feel hunger coursing in me

(Pre-chorus 2)
Just as I think its all over
I feel another scream in my head
As the dinosaur inside tries to escape again
When I thought I was safe and sound
The dinosaur claws at my neck

(Chorus)

(Bridge)
I have no feeling or emotion
With power and strength beyond belief
You will obey my every order
There will never be relief

(Chorus)

(Outro)
The only thoughts I ever had
Are alive and coming over me
Still I strive to destroy this dinosaur
That is inside of me
The other side of me
Raptor



Last edited by TimDisturbed on Sun 21 Aug 2011, 23:38; edited 1 time in total

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Ravensclaw


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that was very good i liked that you can tell alot of though went into it good job



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CrowX


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Good Job really liking the lyrics



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Ravensclaw


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not too sure about the name dinosaur thow it sounds like an 80s flintstone theme tune i would have gone with a disturbed song name like "Raptor" ya know something verocious a carnivore like name



Last edited by Ravensclaw on Sun 11 Sep 2011, 17:56; edited 1 time in total



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JEC


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not bad. I like it :D

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TimDisturbed


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Ravensclaw wrote:not too sure about the name dinosaur thow it sounds like an 80s flintstone theme tune i would have gone with a disturbed song name like "Rapture" ya know something verocious a carnivore like name

Yeah I see what you mean, now that I look at the name "Dinosaur" that way, it does sound goofy. It would be cool to combine 'disturbed' and 'dinosaur' together and make "Dissaur", hahahaha. :)

But I do like that one you came up with, "Rapture". It sounds wicked.

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Ravensclaw


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thank you timdisturbed your lyrics was really good thow



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Do you mean Raptor? Rapture is when all of God's children are whisked to His Kingdom to be let into paradise. Raptor is a speicies of dinosaurs, so that makes more sense. Might wanna check the spelling of a word before you title it as a song...

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Disturbed1forEternity


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Good song... though the word dinosaur makes me think of the Flintstones.

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Ravensclaw


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thanks for noticing that ShockAndAwe
its because i cant see in my corner where my computer is i might have to invest in a lamp of some sort so i can see the keys bit better ya know and great job with the song it does sound more like a disturbed song now raptor



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